– Let’s go! How long can you stay at home?? It will be fun! – Pasha called to his friend Artyom.
– Well, I don’t know what will happen there anyway?
– Yes, I don’t know myself. Looks like the homosexuals staged a demonstration. Let’s go, the men will explain everything on the spot.
Artyom was homely, read a lot. His mother, Anastasia, was young and pretty, but gave birth to her son too early. The husband was not ready, so he quickly disappeared. There was no money in the family, Nastya spent everything on books – hence Artyomka’s love of reading.
His friend, Pasha, was the complete opposite of Artyom. He was fond of football, hung out in apartments, his parents allowed him too much. Once caught by people in uniform for participating in national jogging. He was Russian and did not recognize other nationalities. “Russia for Russians”: that was his motto. By the age of 17, he firmly decided to give up alcohol. There was a temptation to try, of course, but the idea of a sober Russia was firmly lodged in his skull. He considered all drinkers unworthy of himself, and constantly grumbled that alcohol was the first cause of the decomposition of a nation. His mother told Artyom that his father loved to drink, but at the same time he never allowed himself to raise a hand against her and his son, as other fathers did. In Artyom’s memory he remained kind and loving, even though the first never saw the second. Alexey really loved Nastya, but he didn’t want a child so early, he was afraid that it would ruin his career. “We must lay the foundation Nastya. What is a lion worth if he cannot feed his lioness and cub??». But she didn’t listen to him and got pregnant by deception. The result is divorce.
Pasha, in turn, interpreted the situation with his father in his own way: “Of course, I’m sorry Artyom, but your father was such a scumbag. But it’s only partly his fault that he allowed the poison to take over his mind. His mind was all in a fog. Sober and healthy, first of all, with his mind he would never have acted like that.”. Why I got it in the face from Artyom. The blow was weak, until that moment he had not hit anything except the pillow in which he extinguished his rage, as a result of failures.
They met a long time ago. In 2008, when the PlayStation 3 just appeared in their outback. Pasha was the only owner of this console at school. By coincidence, he rashly quarreled with his friends and went home upset. On the way I saw Artyom, they knew each other before, but their acquaintance did not develop beyond a greeting. Pasha decided to invite him to his place, he agreed.
Just the night before, Pashka told his father, a businessman, that he would come with friends after school. The father was very happy; after the move, his son did not get along with other children. Son couldn’t disappoint dad. The folder, as he called him, was an authority for him. The father was very surprised by his son’s new friend, he was a guy with an athletic build, with an active life position, he wanted to become a policeman – not because he put on shoulder straps for the sake of money, but because he had a duty to the people, the father chuckled and said that these were all legends and ancient epics. Artyom was not like that. Skinny guy, he wasn’t interested in sports. Ronaldinho with his feints was alien to him, Bukowski’s style is closer. Dressed in rags: faded black jeans, an old hooded sweater pulled over a white T-shirt, cheap sneakers hiding his old holey socks. But, nevertheless, the father of his, now best friend, liked the guy.
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yes, it turned out okay)
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Could you at least post a link to the first part?. And so the story is normal, I plus any creative beginning.
It’s a disgusting idea, if you post it, then be so kind as to post it in its entirety. What is worth adding a little, and then creating the post?? And so – a person came, read, realized that this was only a piece of the beginning and left offended.
the start went well. let’s move on =)
and, if possible, cut excerpts in the most interesting places… that is, end at the most interesting, so that you want to know the continuation =)
Plus.
In general, getting to know the characters is too intrusive… it’s better when you introduce the reader as the story progresses., but the narration only helps to understand the characters. Something like this in short, here it is.
that’s why I posted only the beginning. I’ll rewrite the best.
As I understood, it is better to conduct a continuous narrative, gradually giving out flashbacks, thoughts and situations that would characterize the character – make him alive. The main thing is not to interrupt and come up with something new. So?
Mmm… Well, I don’t know, but I can definitely say that there is too much information about the guys and their past. And a lot of personal. It would be better if you didn’t reveal their past, but rather their characters in specific situations.
And this, well, not as a complaint, and in general this has nothing to do with my previous words.
It’s not really about flashbacks. That is, you should present situations in which the characters’ personalities would be revealed, and not talk about them (describing appearance, of course, is directly possible, that’s another matter) directly.
to be honest, the other day before writing, I watched Vanomas’ video (not to confuse the author with a shit eater). and he spoke there on this topic. they say the chicks can just swoop in, like: “you have time to get it, I want it right now,” and the man, already on the eve of the “miracle,” cannot stop. or fuck cheat with birth control. to be honest, it sounds stupid, but such cases really do happen. mainly due to the sluggishness of men.
Well, in principle, you need to introduce not only the characters, but also the world presented in the story in general. It’s just that if you pile up all the details and so on at the very beginning, then later all these things will become smeared and something like that.(In general, I tried to express your idea more globally, but it didn’t seem to work out very well)
What kind of news is this??
Yes, you can’t do that >_< Не обращай внимание, я упорот :3 Рассказ нормальный, по мне вполне неплохо
No, well, if you think about it in this way, it’s possible, but in my opinion, it’s more suitable for bitches who then blackmail men.